MUR Posted May 14, 2020 Report Share Posted May 14, 2020 Hi This is an exercise in progress, I want feedback on how to improve it.flor N2.zip MUR Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JRR Posted May 14, 2020 Report Share Posted May 14, 2020 Well done Mur. Two suggestions: 1. I found the title difficult to make out. Maybe make the white thicker or a different font? Different colour maybe, but white should work. 2. I would prefer to see the lower left flower not be cut off at the bottom. I found it bothersome and distracting - likely because I have had it drilled into me in photography courses to not cut things at the frame edge. If you could move it a bit higher and to the left, I think there is room for it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MUR Posted May 14, 2020 Author Report Share Posted May 14, 2020 Hi JRR Thanks for your opinions, I agree and will wait for more comments to make a new version. It is only an exercise (coronavirus time) and not a project, but needs to improve a lot of synchronization and small position adjustment. It has about 180 elements MUR Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MUR Posted May 15, 2020 Author Report Share Posted May 15, 2020 Version 2 MUR Spring v2.zip Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JRR Posted May 15, 2020 Report Share Posted May 15, 2020 Hi MUR Title certainly stands out more. Maybe angle it a bit? The position of the flowers, particularly the one on the left is much better. I don't remember, in version one, the plant stem with the flowers standing out as much as it does in version 2. The background is soft and muted, while the stem is sharp. The two don't seem to blend as well as I recall from ver 1. I like the way the stem twists a little as the buds open. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleina Show Posted May 15, 2020 Report Share Posted May 15, 2020 Hi MUR! I really liked your flowering effect. This is magical! The idea is great. What could I suggest for improvement? Firstly, the sharp bases of the buds stand out strongly against the background of the stems. I would make a soft-edged mask for blurring in these areas. And you can add volume to the flowers. For example, make the front petals with color correction a little darker than the rear. This will make the image more voluminous and real. Best regards Aleina Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MUR Posted May 15, 2020 Author Report Share Posted May 15, 2020 Hi Nice comments, I am going to make them. Thanks for your help in this exercise. MUR Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jean-Cyprien Posted May 17, 2020 Report Share Posted May 17, 2020 Hi MUR, The first version was very nice, but the second version is much much nicer. Bravo. Thanks a lot ! Jean-Cyprien Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MUR Posted May 17, 2020 Author Report Share Posted May 17, 2020 Thanks Jean-Cyprien I am waiting for more comments to improve it, and working in version 3 MUR Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thedom Posted May 21, 2020 Report Share Posted May 21, 2020 Congratulations, it's a great animation! I totally agree with Aleina, that's really good ideas. To improve your animation, you have to take care of the light and try to reproduce it on the flowers in PTE. An other suggestion is with the leaves. They are exactly the same color and orientation (only with different rotation). I suggest to use different color correction + Zoom and Z axis different from on to the other for more diversity. And I think it's possible to simulate a light shadow of the flowers growing on the leaves. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thedom Posted May 21, 2020 Report Share Posted May 21, 2020 I have an other idea for the leaves. For each of them, instead of a single image, you could cut them in two parts int hte middle (along the rib) and put them together with different orientations to give them more "volume". Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MUR Posted May 22, 2020 Author Report Share Posted May 22, 2020 Thanks Thedom It is very good for me to receive advice from other forum members, that helps me improve my exercises and my future projects. I am going to use it in a new version. MUR Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MUR Posted May 23, 2020 Author Report Share Posted May 23, 2020 Hi Ideas received, understood and accepted, although imperfectly implemented Spring v4.zip Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JRR Posted May 23, 2020 Report Share Posted May 23, 2020 Very nicely implemented. I particularly like the background being out of focus and does not "fight" with the subject. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MUR Posted May 23, 2020 Author Report Share Posted May 23, 2020 Thanks This forum is very important in the technical aspects, but it lacks the feedback on the works that other forums have, which I consider necessary. Maybe there should be a section where works in progress are placed, for review MUR Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thedom Posted May 23, 2020 Report Share Posted May 23, 2020 I totally agree, I would like such a new section too Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleina Show Posted May 25, 2020 Report Share Posted May 25, 2020 MUR You are well done! Flowers have acquired the necessary volume, the base of the buds looks neat. I agree with the suggestions of the Dom's regarding the diversity of the appearance of the leaves, making them slightly different. Size, shift in Z, blur and color correction. And imitate the shade of flowers on the leaves. And I fully support the idea of creating such a thematic section on the forum. Aleina. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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